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【托福】满分托福作文竟在照抄原文?
发布时间 : 2023-02-26

托福考试中的综合口语和综合写作应该是不少考生头疼的题目了,不仅考察口语写作能力,还要考察考生的听力能力。再加上不少考生想要拿到高分,会对材料中的内容进行同义替换、改写,增加了不少的答题工作量。


有不少同学会问:托福考试中的综合题到底能不能直接用材料中的原词原句呢?使用了会被打低分么?



01
能不能照抄原文?


在托福官方OG中给出了一份综合写作5分(满分)范文,其中一个片段是这样的:Another problem with the painting was the display of light and shadow. Rembandt was knonwn as a master of painting light and shadow, yet contradictionally the elements inthe work don't fit together. But this problem could also be explained by now. By removing the additional fur collar, one could see that the lady is wearing a simple light colored cloth, which reflects light into her face.


其中a master of painting light and shadow以及the elements inthe work don't fit together是来自阅读材料中的原词原句。removing the additional fur collarwearing a simple light colored cloth, which reflects light into her face是听力材料中的原文原句。

不仅仅是综合写作,综合口语也可以直接使用原词原句,比如:比如TPO30 TASK2的标题是:Campus Construction Should Happen During the Summer,我们在陈述阅读部分的时候可以直接使用这个句子


如果你语言水平一般,为了稳妥起见,可以直接照抄原文。在综合题中,考验你是否能正确并且准确的转述和复述所听到和看到的信息,所以使用原文原句可以做到把话说明白、观点准确、表述不出错。


02
怎么照抄原文?


但是想用原文原句一定要学会如何进行转述和复述!一味的照抄原文很有可能出现以下的现象:

Businesses should encourage their employees to attend all meetings so that employees can get the necessary instruction to complete their jobs efficiently. In addition, attending meetings can help employees build rapport with other co-workers so that workers can get along better without conflict. On the other hand, meetings, especially those longer than one hour, will hurt the productivity of workers. Therefore, meetings should be shortened in most cases to less than an hour, and employees should carry out most communicative tasks by email or phone instead of conducting this business in formal meetings.


看完这一段托福综合写作内容,考官会认为这些想法是你的观点,而产生这个错觉的原因则是因为没有使用转述词,这样的内容以及口吻语气都是不适合托福综合口语和综合写作的。


而修改后,增加了转述词的使用,整篇文章给考官传达的则是别人的想法,这才是符合综合写作的一篇文章:

The author in the reading passages argues that businesses should encourage their employees to attend all meetings so that employees can get the necessary instruction to complete their jobs efficiently. In addition, attending meetings can help employees build rapport with other co-workers, adds the author, so that workers can get along better without conflict. On the other hand, the speaker in the listening passage believes that meetings, especially those longer than one hour, will hurt the productivity of workers. Therefore, meetings should be shortened in most cases to less than an hour, asserts the speaker, and employees should carry out most communicative tasks by email or phone instead of conducting this business in formal meetings.


03
如何做好转述?


想要用好原文原句,准确表达材料中传达的观点,要多使用think,agree这些转述词等,同学们可以在日常练习中多多积累自己的转述词库,养成自己的语言习惯。



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